英语四级高分作文范文批改（1）

　　英语四级待批改作文：
　　Owing to the quikening pace of life and ever--increasing pressure,the number of people who are surffering problems of mental health has greatly increased.According to the recent statistics by Chinese Academy of Social Sciences,60% mental health issues are responsible for many physical diseases.
　　There are a kind of factors for the dramatic growth.First of all,due to the quikening of urban life,competition goes increasingly fierce in all walks of life.This phenomenon puts more pressure on us Chinese in current society.In addition,we haven't received necessary supports from my relatives and friends.last but not least,we are lacking in the ability of international communication.We are so shy that we cannot talk to anyone about our inner thought freely.
　　In my opinion,there is no denying that further attention must be paid to the problem of mental health.We should take effective actions to prevent the situation.For one thing,it's necessary for us to expand the range of our communication.For another,we should enhance our ability to face various challenges in life.Only in this way can we become winners in this competitive world ,and will have a briliant future.

　　作文批改如下：
　　Owing to the quikening（改为fast） pace of life and ever--increasing pressure,the number of people who are surffering(改为 suffering)problems of mental health has greatly increased.According to the recent statistics by Chinese Academy of Social Sciences,60% mental health issues are responsible for many physical diseases.
　　There are a kind of（改为many）factors for the dramatic growth.First of all,due to the quikening(改为fast pace) of urban life,competition goes increasingly fierce in all walks of life.This phenomenon puts more pressure on us Chinese in current society.In addition,we haven't received necessary supports from my(改为our)relatives and friends.last (首字母大写)but not least,we are lacking in the ability of international（用词错误，改为interpersonal）communication.We are so shy that we cannot talk to anyone about our inner thought freely.
　　In my opinion,there is no denying that further attention must be paid to the problem of mental health.We should take effective actions to prevent the situation.For one thing,it's necessary for us to expand the range of our communication.For another,we should enhance our ability to face various challenges in life.Only in this way can we become winners in this competitive world ,and （加we）will have a briliant (拼写错误，改为brilliant）future.

　　同学你好，作文整体写的不错，但是要在细节上多加注意，拼写错误的问题尽量不要出现，另外，不要在一个句子中一会用we,一会又用I。