英语六级2分作文范文批改1

　　英语六级待批改作文:
　　Fast Food is more popular though citizens, especially young man and children. They eat them at least once a week.
　　The time of the people to have a break and to eat meal is compressed by citizens who work hard though the fast pace of life in modern society. So they choose Western Fast Food which is made to convenient and you-don’t-wait, of course it’s delicious, that they can have much more time to work.
　　As for children, maybe Fast Food is the in-thing among them. Eating a KFC will be pride in their young heart. They will share the experience of enjoying KFC or MacDonald to their best friends. Unforgettable delicious for children is as it should be.
　　As far as I am concerned, the collective canteen which should offer high quality food must be opened more by company. For children, parents ought to educate kids what is healthy food and what food shouldn’t be eat more.

　　作文批改如下：
　　（加Western）Fast Food is more popular though（改为among citizens, especially young man and children. They eat them at least once a week.
　　The time of the people to have a break and to eat meal is compressed by citizens who work hard though the fast pace of life in modern society. (不能理解你的意思)So they choose Western Fast Food which is made to convenient and you-don’t-wait, of course it’s delicious,（改为convenient and delicious）（加so）that they can have much more time to work.
　　As for children, maybe Fast Food is the in-thing（错误） among them. Eating a（改为in） KFC will be pride in their young heart. They will share the experience of enjoying KFC or MacDonald to（改为with） their best friends. Unforgettable delicious for children is as it should be.(不能理解你的意思)
　　As far as I am concerned, the collective canteen which should offer high quality food must be opened more by company（删除）. For children, parents ought to educate kids what is healthy food and what food shouldn’t be eat more.

　　同学你好，四六级作文都是三段式，而且题目中已经规定了每段要写的内容，要仔细审题！你的英语基础比较薄弱，尽量用简单句，要记住，十个正确的简单句比一个错误的长句要好百倍。