英语六级8分作文范文批改1

　　英语六级待批改作文：

　　In recent years, psychologically healthy has become quite a serious problem. As for the reasons psychologically healthy, there are many factors contributing to it.

　　It is conceivable that it has mainly arisen from the two following factors. For one thing, with the speedy development of our society, people will go through many kinds of challenges. Thus, some people often are in pressure. For another, in this day and age, some people feel reluctant to approach. They lack the skill of interpersonal communication.

　　Taking all the above-mentioned factors into consideration, it is imperative of us to take effective measures to keep psychological healthy. To begin with, we should appeal to authorities to cultivate the awareness of people that keeping psychological healthy is of great significance. For another, people should try to develop the ability of interpersonal communication. Only in this way can we have a brilliant future.

　　作文批改如下：
　　In recent years, psychologically healthy（心理健康不是一个严重的问题，心理疾病才是问题，此处改为psychological disease）has become quite a(改为a quite) serious problem. As for the reasons (加for)psychologically healthy(同上), there are many factors contributing to it.（题目要求本段写心理健康问题是导致疾病的主要原因，并不是写很多原因导致心理不健康，你应该把题目的要求翻译成英文，在下一段再写最后一句话）
　　It is conceivable that it has mainly arisen from the two following factors. For one thing, with the speedy development of our society, people will go through many kinds of challenges. Thus, some people often are in(改为under) pressure. For another, in this day and age, some people feel reluctant to approach(加other people). They lack the skill of interpersonal communication.
　　Taking all the above-mentioned factors into consideration, it is imperative of us to take effective measures to keep psychological（加ly） healthy. To begin with, we should appeal to authorities to cultivate the awareness of people that keeping psychological(加ly) healthy is of great significance. For another, people should try to develop the ability of interpersonal communication. Only in this way can we have a brilliant future.

同学你好，拿到题目后首先要仔细分析一下题目的要求，六级考试的题目都很明确，首段基本是要将题目原话给翻译一下，千万不能跑题。像你写的这个首段就很容易被认为是跑题。